ubuntu: integrate review comments from glen

Signed-off-by: Nicolas Dechesne <nicolas.dechesne@linaro.org>

1 files changed, 6 insertions, 6 deletions

diff --git a/ubuntu/boards/snapdragon/README.textile.in b/ubuntu/boards/snapdragon/README.textile.in
index 5adff2c..3df328f 100644
--- a/ubuntu/boards/snapdragon/README.textile.in
+++ b/ubuntu/boards/snapdragon/README.textile.in
@@ -1,16 +1,16 @@
-The Linaro Qualcomm Landing Team is pleased to announce the new release of the _Snapdragon 600 Linux Platform_. The  _Snapdragon 600 Linux Platform_ ##RELEASE## release is an Ubuntu-based Linaro Member Build that provides a _desktop like_ environment using Ubuntu and the Gnome desktop, as well as a console-only image for developers.
+The Linaro Qualcomm Landing Team is pleased to announce the new release of the _Snapdragon 600 Linux Platform_. The  _Snapdragon 600 Linux Platform_ ##RELEASE## release is an Ubuntu-based Linaro Member Build that provides developers with a _desktop like_ environment using Ubuntu and the Gnome desktop, as well as a console-only image.
 
 h4. What's new in this release
 
 * This release is based on Ubuntu 14.10
 * This release is based on Linux kernel v3.17
-* The following boards are supported: Inforce IFC6410, Compulab CM-QS600.
-* The graphic stack is using Mesa master branch as of 11/12/2014, and libdrm 2.4.58
-* The serial device node name is changed from ttyHSL to ttyMSM since Linux kernel 3.14
+* The release supports the following boards: Inforce IFC6410, Compulab CM-QS600.
+* The graphic stack has been updated and is using Mesa master branch as of 11/12/2014, and libdrm 2.4.58
+* The serial device node name has been changed from ttyHSL to ttyMSM since Linux kernel 3.14
 * Bug fixed:
 ** N/A
 
-This is the first release of a new series with major changes compared to all previous Linaro member builds releases. From now on the Linaro member monthly builds for Snapdragon 600 will be using the most recent Linux kernel available at the time of the release. The main goal from now on is to close the gaps in features with regards to the mainline kernel, rather than use the existing 3.4 vendor kernel. One immediate consequence is that some regressions are expected, such as for now: lack of audio support, video hardware acceleration, bluetooth and support for running CPU beyond 1Ghz.
+This is the first release of a new series for the Snapdragon 600 Linux Platform. Going forward, the Linaro member monthly builds for Snapdragon 600 will be providing a kernel based on the most recent Linux kernel ("www.kernel.org":https://www.kernel.org) available at the time of the release. The goals of the Linaro Release are to align with the latest Linux Kernel, close the gaps in features provided and migrate from the existing 3.4 vendor kernel. One immediate consequence of this migration is that some regressions are expected. Current regressions include: lack of audio support, video hardware acceleration, bluetooth and support for running CPU beyond 1Ghz.
 
 h4. Features
 
@@ -25,7 +25,7 @@ The following features are currently supported by the ##RELEASE## version of the
 * All images have a pre-configured user called @linaro@, and the password for this user is set to @linaro@
 * The root file system can be installed on eMMC or any other external media such as USB, SD card, SATA.
 * Android Debug Bridge (adb) can be used to connect to the target
-* The following Snapdragon 600 based boards are supported:
+* Support for the following Snapdragon 600 based boards:
 ** Inforce IFC6410 Rev P1 and A1, Inforce IFC6412
 ** Compulab CM-QS600
 * The following Snapdragon 600 features are supported: